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#645: Regarding the adjustment of article structure

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„HP approaches the magic world()” “HP走近魔法世界()” „If so, that said passed, I often will then possibly come back, now Hogwarts has no ban to me, I can leave there at any time, therefore to then plan the perfect implementation and you some situations, I will come probably once in a while, something I have not been able to tell you now, if by any chance after he completes, I can tell you, but at your present progress, probably these two years things you must write some time.” “如果是这样的话,那就说的通了,我接下来可能会时常回来,现在霍格沃茨已经对我没有什么禁令,我可以随时离开那里,所以为了接下来计划的完美实施和你这边的一些情况,我大概每隔一段时间就会过来一趟,有些东西我现在还不能告诉你,但等他完成之后我才可以告诉你,不过以你现在的进度,大概这两年的东西你也得写一段时间。” „This I know certainly.” “这个我当然知道。” Joanne also sits to set out, some draft manuscripts that Jon hands over, places on own leg carefully. 乔安妮也坐起身来,将乔恩递过来的一部分手稿,小心地放在自己的腿上。 „This time asks you to come, indeed is because among my issue documents also met some troublesome, some contents need to consider with you, can continue, for example this,” “不过这次找你来,的确是因为我行文之间也遇到了一些麻烦,有些内容得需要跟你斟酌一下,才能够继续下去,就比如这一段,” She refers to a plot that the small sirius presented that „just you indeed left were so long, these things you knew similar?” 她指了指小天狼星出现的一段剧情,“只不过你的确离开了这么久,这些事情你都知道的差不多吗？” „Relax, I not only have the file of writing to save, but also some people narrated to me, therefore these things I understood compared with you profoundly.” “放心,我不仅有文字的档案存着,还有人给我叙述,所以这些东西我比你了解的更加深刻一点。” The most important thing is he had read the original works, knows probably this place had anything. 最重要的是他曾经看过原著,大概知道这个地方发生了什么东西。 The present condition is very strange, Joanne is that side that writes to write, but he is more like an editor but actually, here directs to Joanne, how each should revise. 现在的状况很奇怪,乔安妮是执笔去写的那一方,而他倒更像是一个编辑,在这里给乔安妮指点,每一步该怎么修改。 This character transforms, indeed is also a little rapid. 这人物转换的,的确也是有点飞速。 „It looks like from my angle, I thought that you do not need to be worried about his crosswise issue completely, because this story happened in the real world, the points of its all keys exist, you do not need to be worried logical issue that its whole conducts, this logic certainly by real world self consistent method, you, so long as processed each story the introduction , elucidation , transposition and summary to be OK, to put it bluntly, wrote a book by Hogwarts's concept, you felt it most important what should be?” “从我的角度看来,我觉得你完全不用担心他横向的问题,因为这个故事是发生在真实世界之中的,它所有的关键的点都是真实存在的,你并不用担心它整体进行的逻辑问题,这个逻辑一定会被真实世界所自洽,你只要处理每一个故事的起承转合就可以了,说白了,以霍格沃茨的这个概念去写一本书的话,你觉得它最重要的应该是什么？” „Hogwarts is a school, naturally is one year a story.” “霍格沃茨是学校,当然是一年一个故事啊。” „ Right, we must firmly hold the status of student, because you must know, your story writes, it and not only to giving people in magic world, must distribute in the hemp melon society to serve as a bigger use simultaneously, this use your I know in heart, therefore has no need saying that but can make the hemp melon society admit such a literary work, you must first to them an enormous reason, but best from an angle of student. “没错,我们要紧紧抓住学生的这个身份,因为你要知道,你这本故事写出来,它并不仅仅是面向给魔法世界的人们,同时要发行到麻瓜社会之中用作更大的用途,这个用途你我心里有数,所以用不着说出来,但能够让麻瓜社会去接纳这样一本文学作品,你首先要给他们一个极大的理由,而从一个学生的角度是最好不过的了。 In this world, child's money best gain, 在这个世界上,孩子的钱是最好赚的, An resembles beautiful fairy tale that so long as writes this story slightly, has the complete plot, plot that fluctuates excitedly, this is enough, 只要将这个故事稍微写的像一个美丽的童话,有完整的剧情,还有激动起伏的情节,这就已经足够了, Right, the story must first buckle in those words that Dumbledores often spoke, is the love body, 哦,对了,故事首先还是要扣在邓布利多常说的那句话,就是爱的身上, You wrote a story each school year alone, then these seven years story will deliver with a line skewer, in this case, wasn't this story very complete? ” 你将每一个学年都单独写成一个故事,然后再将这七年的故事用一条线串送起来,这样的话,这个故事不就很完整了吗？” Especially now has not distributed this book, very big leeway modifies, connections between two books, must guarantee that vague relation, seems like no relations, but must achieve the connection of foreshadowing and feedback. 尤其是现在还没有将这本书发行出去,还有很大的余地去改动,前后两本书之间的连接,一定要保证若有若无的联系,看似没什么关系,但一定得做到伏笔和反馈的连接。 These things did not need Jon to say specially, because as a writer, Joanne was creates certainly this aspect to have very high understanding of Yu Wenxue. 这些东西并不用乔恩去特意说,因为作为一个作家来讲,乔安妮一定是对于文学创作这方面有非常高的理解的。 If he does not have the sufficient preparation in this aspect, she will not say such plan with Jon initially. 如果他没有这方面的充足准备,她也不会在当初和乔恩说出那样的计划。 „However compares the integrity of entire story, whether the world outlook improves is not so actually important, the story that because we construct, its world outlook is the construction above the real world, this world outlook is inborn complete, cannot need us to go to specially construction anything, after we break the barrier of this world, will certainly lead to raging tide, but under that type of worldwide basis raging tide, the book world outlook on is not important.” “而相比于整个故事的完整性而言,世界观是否完善其实并不是那么重要,因为我们所构造出来的这本故事,它的世界观是架构在真实的世界之上的,这个世界观天生就是完整的,根本用不到我们去特意架构些什么,等到我们将这个世界的屏障打破之后,就一定会引发出一个狂潮,而在那种世界性的狂潮之下,书的世界观就没有那么重要了。” Who will care about a world outlook of component biography body book in real society to be complete? 谁又会在意一本构件在真实社会之中的传记体的书的世界观是否完整呢？ Nod that Joanne appears to understand but not really understand, 乔安妮似懂非懂的点点头, These things in the brain, she needs time to digest probably. However this time they have, therefore does not worry. 将这些东西记在脑子里,她大概需要一点时间去消化一下。不过这点时间他们还是有的,所以并不着急。 „ A little is quite important, is if has if possible, the thing that can delete erases as far as possible, meaning that I said not with my related thing, but is this story inside thing, thing that can delete, erases as far as possible, “还有一点比较重要,就是如果有可能的话,能够删的东西还是尽量删掉,我说的意思不是跟我有关的东西,而是这个故事里面的东西,能够删的东西,还是尽量删掉一点, In the final analysis it is not biography in a real significance, we must consider from its dissemination, 归根结底它并不是一本真实意义上的传记,我们还是要从它的传播性来考虑, But dissemination is quite simple regarding the request of story, so long as you wrote a complete story to be good, 而传播性对于故事的要求比较简单,你只要写出一个完备的故事就好了, This is an school, several students, a black demon, the story of justice and evil between struggle, have no need to spend so many lengths to construct among them the gratitude and grudges, they oppose naturally . Moreover the hatred enough has made up for all gratitude and grudges and other things. ” 这就是一座学院,几个学生,一个黑魔头,正义和邪恶之间的斗争的故事,用不着花费那么多的篇幅去构造他们之间的恩怨,他们天然就对立,而且仇恨已经足够弥补所有的恩怨和其他的东西了。” „The sentiment love love about Lord Voldemort and so on, pouring not to need to go to defer to these bordered news to construct so many, we can specious, leaves an imaginary space to the reader who he writes, in any case this book release time, others do not have.” “关于伏地魔的情情爱爱之类的,倒没有必要去按照那些花边新闻去构造出来那么多,我们可以把他写的似是而非一点,给读者留出一点想象空间吧,反正这本书发行的时候,他人已经没了。” Regarding a dead person, all things did not have the means to try to prove, because after dying not verified, this person best result lives in the imagination of others, in the hearts of 1000 readers naturally had 1000 Hamlet, why can't that make in 1000 individual hearts have 1000 Harry Potter or is Lord Voldemort? 对于一个已经死去的人,所有事情都没有办法求证,因为死无对证之后,这个人最好的结局就是活在其他人的想象里面,一千个读者的心中自然有一千个哈姆雷特,那为什么不能够让一千个人心中有一千个哈利・波特或者是伏地魔呢？ To be honest, because Harry Potter exists, therefore the first article achieves very much difficultly, after but when Lord Voldemort died, the second article can definitely achieve. 老实说,因为哈利・波特是真实存在的,所以第一条很难去做到,但等到伏地魔死去之后,第二条就完全可以做到了。 „If so, that is not,” “如果是这样的话,那也不是不可以,” Joanne extracts a pen conveniently, writes the plan of this adjustment in the back of manuscript paper, and added several lines of notes in behind. 乔安妮随手抽出一支笔来,将这个调整的计划写在稿纸的背面,并且在后面添上了几行备注。 But Jon also knows that these things not necessarily are completely real, particularly above the character portray of Lord Voldemort, he needs to make the intelligence quotient of Lord Voldemort reduce, but how should do specifically, he is not quite clear, during the following some time, his primary mission is this makes a relatively complete plan, then promotes Lord Voldemort to go toward their established results. 而乔恩也知道这些东西未必是完全真实的,尤其是在伏地魔的人物刻画之上,他需要让伏地魔这个人的智商降低一些,但具体应该怎么做,他还不太清楚,在接下来的一段时间之中,他的主要任务就是这个制定一个相对完整的计划,然后去推动伏地魔朝他们既定的结局去走。 Not only included the member of Harry and phoenix society during this plan, also included Lord Voldemort this final villain. 在这个计划之中不仅仅包括了哈利和凤凰社的成员,也同样包括了伏地魔这个最终的反派。 But even Dumbledores does not have the means to forecast the behavior path of Lord Voldemort completely, but Jon this person who opens hangs yes. 而就算是邓布利多也没有办法完全预测伏地魔的行为轨迹,可乔恩这个开挂的人是可以的。 Naturally in others do not know that he opens in the situation of hanging, something should not be done obviously is quite so good. 当然在别人都不知道他开挂的情况下,有些事情还是不要做的那么明显比较好。 A lot can advance him to observe the ability of destiny to come up, Jon thinks. 很多事情都可以推到他窥测命运的能力上去,乔恩这么想到。
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