HPAMW :: Volume #4 战争序幕·暗流涌动

#135: Had the guest to arrive

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Joanne is a bright person, probably Jon remembers that in that Ms. Lorraine is the same, this miss indeed has very powerful talent in the literature. 乔安妮是个有才华的人,像是乔恩记忆里面的那个罗琳女士一样,这位姑娘的确在文学上有着非常强大的天赋。 But in Jon remembers that woman, in the situation in about the magic world knowing nothing, completed that lengthy famous work «Harry Potter» alone, but now Jon Joanne, has to the sorcerer actual understanding. 只不过乔恩记忆里面的那位女士,是在对魔法世界一无所知的情况下,独自完成了那本长篇名著《哈利・波特》,而现在乔恩身边的乔安妮,有对巫师界实际了解。 Book that in this case creates, Jon who inside certain contents should be able to write remembers that inside content, is more splendid. 在这种情况下创作出来的书,里面的某些内容应该会写的比乔恩记忆里面的内容,更加出色吧。 Jon could not have remembered that in original book, Chapter 1 described for 11 years ago introduces boy who was survived time, to description that Dumbledores and Maige taught, among them the dialogue said anything, Jon remembers that was not very clear, he still remembers that extinguisher and squatted the cat in corner, rode the motor to drop from the clouds. 乔恩已经记不得在原书里面,第一章描述十一年前引入大难不死的男孩的时候,对邓布利多和麦格教授的描写了,他们之间的对话说了什么,乔恩记得也不是很清楚,他只是还记得那个熄灯器和蹲在墙角上的猫,还有海格骑着摩托从天而降。 Then did not have, the thing that Jon can remember are not many, naturally is selecting the main spell and plot records, next is the big plot and character, finally remembers. 然后就没有了,乔恩本来能记得的东西就不多,当然是挑着主要的魔咒和剧情记,其次是大的故事情节和人物,最后才是记忆。 Jon thinks, oneself arrived at the female loyal road to think many concrete descriptions, went Ollie like one year at that time, he in the shop, recalled that classical description. 原本乔恩以为,自己到了女贞路就能想起来不少具体的描述,就像一年前去奥利凡德那时候,他就在店里面,回忆起来了那句经典的描写。 Cannot remember have looked at the content of book, this matter possibly has many explanations, or is because the outflow of time wore down Jon's spirit, either was the new thing occupied his memory space, even yes, after Khelga changed his world outlooks several times, he started gradually to forget these and past related matter. 想不起来自己看过的书的内容,这种事情可能有很多解释,或者是因为时间的流失消磨了乔恩的精神,或者是新生的事物占据了他的记忆空间,甚至是,在赫尔加改变了几次他的世界观之后,他就开始逐渐忘记那些与过去相关的事情。 The explanation are too many, is out of the question. 解释太多,无从谈起。 In the final analysis, always because of these things already no longer important reason. 归根结底,总是因为那些东西都已经不再重要的缘故。 The world same world, no change, Sun will as if raise as before, will throw down the ray in the sky of garden, illuminates in front of the room to mount the bronze data plate on wall ; 世界似乎还是一样的世界,没有什么变化,太阳依旧会升起,会在花园的上空投下光芒,照亮屋子前面镶嵌在墙上的铜质铭牌; In the room people go out the work day after day, 屋子里面的人都日复一日地出门工作, Each is exactly the same in the evening, but after finishing eating the food went to the room to sleep, occasionally had a look at the television, occasionally accompanied the lover to relax. 每一个晚上都一模一样,只是在吃完饭之后回房间睡觉,偶尔看看电视,偶尔陪陪爱人放松一下。 Only then on the fireplace is hanging the picture, is demonstrating elapsing of time, and growth and dying of old age of person. 只有壁炉上挂着的照片,显示着时光的逝去,以及人的成长和老去。 The time is this. 时间就是这样的。 „Our lives, actually consume during such time.” “我们的人生,其实就是在这样的时光之中耗费掉的啊。” Jon completed today's magic practice- is only the brain seal technique and takes to read to own absorbing god, then shoved open the door. 乔恩完成了今天的魔法练习-只是大脑封闭术和对自己的摄神取念,然后推开了房门。 Nine o'clock are not is early late, Jon goes downstairs, Joanne has prepared the bread and milk to him, oneself proofread the draft manuscript on the table. 九点钟不算早也不算晚,乔恩下楼的时候,乔安妮已经给他准备好了面包和牛奶,自己在桌子上面校对手稿。 The finished draft manuscript were not many, after looking at Jon's update's Chapter 1 mentality, Joanne then had the inspiration, the voluminous several pages of papers, completed yesterday evening and this morning. 写完的手稿并不多,看完乔恩的新版第一章的思路之后,乔安妮便有了灵感,洋洋洒洒好几页纸,都是在昨天晚上和今天早上完成的。 „Got up? Comes to eat meal, has a look at this chapter of content while convenient.” “起来了？过来吃饭吧,顺便看看这一章的内容。” Joanne greeted, Jon also walked amenable. 乔安妮招呼道,乔恩也顺从地走了过去。 Chapter 1 the front content also has no major problem, according to Jon said that thinks of ritual one to start to introduce from virtue, emphasized virtue thinks of the ritual couple regarding the repugnant and conflict of magic world, as well as joyfully celebrating of sorcerers. 第一章前面的内容都还没有什么大问题,按照乔恩说的,从德思礼一家开始引入,强调了德思礼夫妇对于魔法世界的反感和矛盾冲突,以及巫师们的欢庆。 „Here I thought that can add a content, I felt, if you want to portray the character disposition of Dumbledores, then actually you can work hard on his attire, in your MI0 file should have Dumbledores's picture?” “这里我觉得可以加一点内容,我觉得如果你想要刻画出邓布利多这个人的人物性格,那么其实你可以在他的衣着上面下点功夫,你们MI0的档案里应该是有邓布利多的照片的吧？” „Has actually, but this matter I always thought that is not quite good, after all the strength of Mr. Dumbledores is we are inconceivable, I am worried......” “有倒是有,只不过这件事情我总觉得不太好,毕竟邓布利多先生的实力是我们难以想象的,我担心……” „ Does not need to be worried about this, I will look for a time say this matter and Mr. Dumbledores, and finds the way to make him agree that our plans- in fact, this plan had helped Dumbledores's idea. “不必担心这个,我会找个时间把这个事情和邓布利多先生提出来,并想办法让他同意我们的计划-事实上,这个计划本来就对邓布利多的想法有所帮助。 However before that your writing should be the security, besides the MI0 head, should better not to pass on, must say to that person who the magic section comes, only said your first meaning, do not make him detect a deeper level the meaning. 不过在那之前,你的写作都应该是保密的,除了MI0的负责人之外,最好不要传出去,对魔法部来的那个人也要这么说,只说你的第一层意思,不要让他察觉到更深层次的意思。 Moreover, I was not and you had said before, in your story the main character should be ‚boy who our was survived’, rather than Dumbledores, wrote too Dumbledores, can somewhat compete? ” 而且,我之前不是和你说过吗,你故事里面主要的人物应该是我们的‘大难不死的男孩’,而不是邓布利多,写太多邓布利多,会不会有些喧宾夺主啊？” „But this is inappropriate, you do not make me write about in the story you, this I can accept, but according to you said, Mr. Dumbledores places the great expectations on Harry Potter, then he can definitely pay attention to Harry Potter frequently, in this case, how we can not only reduces his content, and manifests his ability and to Harry's concern? Without this guide, how should Harry Potter's growth display?” “可是这不合适吧,你不让我把你写到故事中,这个我可以接受,但是按你所说,邓布利多先生对哈利・波特寄予厚望,那么他肯定是会时刻关注着哈利・波特的,这样的话,我们怎么才能既减少他的内容,又体现他的能力和对哈利的关怀呢？没有这位引路人,哈利・波特的成长又该怎么表现呢？” „Misery will help the person grow, the responsibility is also.” “苦难会帮助人成长,责任也是。” Jon drank a milk: „First two chapters of contents are mainly confessed that Harry Potter here life cause and process, this written to the region is the hemp melon society rather than the sorcerer society, you should understand meaning that I said.” 乔恩喝了一口牛奶:“前两章的内容主要就是交代哈利・波特在这里生活的起因和经过,这本书面对的区域是麻瓜社会而不是巫师社会,你应该明白我说的意思吧。” Joanne nods, she understands certainly the intent hemp melon society that Jon regarding yearning of mysterious strength, will make them be interested in this sorcerer from the beginning, but will have nothing can one in the young sorcerer who in the hemp melon family will grow up had the substitution feeling- the bitter experience that if this young sorcerer was more pitiful, then sympathized can lead into the role rapidly. 乔安妮点头,她当然明白乔恩的意麻瓜社会对于神秘力量的向往,会让他们一开始就对这个巫师感兴趣,而没有什么会比一个在麻瓜家庭之中长大的小巫师更能让人有代入感了-如果这个小巫师的遭遇悲惨,那么同情就更加能够让人迅速带入角色了。 This is writing one skill that the fairy tale often uses, through giving to lead pitiful past and glorious future, gives the reader to read the experience comfortably, but there is an issue. 这是在写童话时常用的一种技巧,通过赋予给主角悲惨的过去和美好的未来,来给予读者更舒服的阅读体验,只是有一个问题。 „According to this mentality, we are completely more exaggerating regarding the description of Harry Potter childhood deals with, but can't take the too long-term length?” “按照这种思路来说,我们对于哈利・波特童年的这段描述完全夸大一些来进行处理,但是不能够占用太长时间的篇幅吧？” „Naturally, you must know, although the literary creation can fictionalize slightly, but Harry Potter after all is a sorcerer, and has the strong prestigious sorcerer, we cannot describe too many about his pitiful childhood, such will destroy him the image in sorcerer populace heart, writes a point to make him be pitied slightly and that's the end, this criterion should you be able to grasp?” “当然,你要知道,虽然文学创作可以稍加虚构,可是哈利・波特毕竟是一个巫师,而且是具有超强声望的巫师,我们不能描述太多关于他的悲惨童年,那样会破坏他在巫师大众心中的形象,稍稍写一点让他被怜悯就是了,这个尺度你应该可以把握住吧？” Joanne has certainly this ability, or the writing has this ability, is only according to writer's writing the application of custom and technique, seems somewhat different. 乔安妮当然有这个能力,或者说,文字本身就有这种能力,只是根据作家本身的写作习惯和手法的应用,显得有些不同。 She was just about to start to write to start to revise the note, the doorbell made a sound suddenly. 她正要落笔开始修改笔记,门铃忽然响了起来。 Jon puts down the cup, will open the door, that side Joanne has stood. 乔恩放下杯子,正要去开门,那边乔安妮已经站了起来。 „I go.” “我去吧。” She looked at Jon, asked: 她看了眼乔恩,问道: „Is so early, who can be comes?” “这么早,会是谁来啊？” Jon also looked at one to place tea table that side envelope, showed a faint smile. 乔恩同样看了一眼放在茶几那边的信封,微微一笑。 „Should, be our guests arrives.” “应该,是我们的客人到了。”
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